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I'm just a girl.
Not pure of mind or pearl of skin, nor with silk as hair or lips of red.
Not your princess in a tower- never lost to be found- always calm, always sure.
A girl with a story, but none to be heard.
Eyes of blue, waves of white- watching a puddle, blending with the sky.
You were just a boy.
A boy of thoughts and a boy of shadows, a boy- eyes dark as night.
Lack of laughter, a smile of sunsets, seldom seen.
Wandering through the hours of midnight- hands shoved in pockets, foggy breath his only light.
Stumbling through the minutes of early dawn or late dusk, opposites can attract.
Grasping hands slipping apart as dusk and dawn fades away.

Had a bit of a writer's block, so I forced this out. Decent- yes, no, maybe so?
As you can see, the girl is pretty much Day and the boy is basically Night- I considered going more into their story, but this seemed like enough. What say you, reader?

*Image is not mine, found here: [link] *
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Kalen-Bloodstone Jun 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
There's a story I found on Librovox Recording for free, it was called the Day boy and the Night girl, or possibly the opposite- it's kinda like this, only more depth because it was a longer piece of literature with more details as well as a sub-plot . . . anyway, if you're interested it should be hard to find.
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EvelynTaliette Jun 7, 2012  Student Writer
I might search it up eventually, this was mostly a forced out piece of writing because I've had trouble recently. I might go back over it and try to re-write it, but I might look up it up eventually, thanks!
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Kalen-Bloodstone Jun 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
LOL no problem Eve. You don't have to, but it reminded me of it so I decided to pass it along :)

How long have you been in a rut? With Writing. I had this huge gap between December and . . . April? Yeah, April.
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EvelynTaliette Jun 7, 2012  Student Writer
A couple weeks or so X-x I write a paragraph or two, then I stop and leave it, then I never get around to finishing it. Or I finish it and I'm completely unsatisfied with how it turned out, it's fairly annoying. Trying to just force something out but the first result from that experiment was the piece up above. The writing gods have turned their back on me!
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Kalen-Bloodstone Jun 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Nvm, it wasn't you. But there is a 100 theme prompt going on here [link] The only way I got back to writing was this Zombie poetry thing for a month. Each day you wrote something, or else you became a Zombie yourself.
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EvelynTaliette Jun 7, 2012  Student Writer
I'm kind've thinking of just signing up for a a whole ton of contests, but then again if I do bad I'll feel even worse. Hmmm, I do need a couple thousand prompts to feast on though, maybe I can do prose instead of poetry for those hundred theme contests, but it's hard to imbue stories in just one feeling or word
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Kalen-Bloodstone Jun 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
There we go! Just something that will let the words flow. Go to #ScreamPrompts for evil ones (i.e. hard) or look around in general for others.

Oh, and thanks for the watch and the nice words :hug:
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EvelynTaliette Jun 7, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks! I'll have to take a shot at them.

And you're welcome! I watch because I'm interested in your work, and I favorite if it means something to me or I absolutely love it, so everything is well deserved!
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Kalen-Bloodstone Jun 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh really? Well they are harsh Gods. But aren't you doing some 100-thing prompt with ~CelestialMemories ? Hopefully that will help, y'know.
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I really liked the concept of this. ^^ Opposites can make for fun new adventures. =D
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